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The use of internet is increasing. Did you know that around 65% of the world's population is an internet consumer ? Write the advantages and disadvantages of the internet.

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Introduction
The
internet
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importent
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important
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pepole
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people
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easey
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easy
 life. Many people
use
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 the
internet
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everyday
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. The
internet
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 has both positive and negative issues.
This
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Body paragraph 1
There are many advantages
in
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 using the
internet
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. first of all, the
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people
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use
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internet
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 every day to
compolet
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complete
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pepole
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People
 need
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the internet
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internet
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 to buy clothes ,
shose
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shoes
, and
dresess
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dresses
in the
brogrem
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program
. People
use
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 the
internet
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 for email.
Also
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 for movies and games.
Body paragraph 2
secondley
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Secondly
, they
use
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internet
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the internet
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 net in the banke to
safe
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save
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maney
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money
, carde
internrt
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internet
.
Body paragraph 3
However
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 , there are many disadvantages of the
internet
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 in
the
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life.
Body paragraph 4
First,
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The
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people
pepole
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 stey
alot
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a lot
 of time
to play
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 games
in
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on
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the internet
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internet
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 and
these way
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 no
healthey
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healthy
 to
badey
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badly
.
Body paragraph 5
Second,
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boys and
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girls
feeling
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feel
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 alone every time , some
childrens
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children
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 need
mam
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their mam
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 or dad to sleep
ner
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near
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him
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them
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becouse
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because
 feel
some one
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someone
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 see in the window .
Conclusion
The conclusion , it is easy to see that advantages to
use
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internet
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.
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However
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 there are some disadvantages
in
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to
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 using the
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internet
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. It can change
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many
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people
 how to
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use
well.

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