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The table shows the estimated literocy rate by region and gander for 2000-2004.

The table shows the estimated literocy rate by region and gander for 2000-2004.
#literocy #rate #region #gander
The given tabular chart
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depicts
 the
inforation
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information
 about the evaluation done on the basis of area and sex of education rate from 2000-2004. Overview,the highest
literocy
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literacy
 rate was in Europe and
lowest
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the lowest
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 was in Africa. It is lucid from the chart ,
total
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 ratio of educated people in the globe was 82.2%
in
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 which 87.2% were
males
 and 77.3% were females. In
Africa
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 the
persent
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per cent
present
 of
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 was 71.6% and 53.9% in the Category of
males
 and
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females
families
, respectively.
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 difference of 0.1% was witnessed in both
literated
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literate
literature
liberated
 men and
woman
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women
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 in America. Moving
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 to the rest of the information, it
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 that Asian
males
(85.9%) were more educated as compared to females (72.5%). A slight difference (0.7%) was seen between the well-educated
males
 and
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females
families
 of
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Europe
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, 93.4% of Ocenia people were educated.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words males with synonyms.
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