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The table below shows how young people in Tokyo, Japan, listened to music over the previous month. The pie chart shows a record company's international findings about whether people preferred live or recorded music. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how young people in Tokyo, Japan, listened to music over the previous month. The pie chart shows a record company's international findings about whether people preferred live or recorded music. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table displays information on different favourite methods to reproduce
music
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 in the city of Tokyo by young people,
while
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 the pie chart gives information about a record company’s international results on preferences between live or recorded
music
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.
Overall
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, MP3 players were the most chosen method to reproduce
music
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 by young people,
while
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 live
music
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 achieved the highest rate contrasting to recorded
music
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. Beginning with the table,
it is clear that
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 males use more
music
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 players than females, with the exception of CDs. The most chosen player was an MP3 player, followed by live
music
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 and the internet, with a total of 79%, 60%, and 55%, respectively.
However
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, females consumed a higher rate than males listening to
music
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 via CDs, achieving a total of 22%, compared to 19%. Looking at the pie chart, there was a clear difference between both preferences.
While
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 recorded
music
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 reached 26% of listeners, live
music
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 reached 70%, more than double.
In addition
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, 4% of people did not have any particular preference for the type of
music
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. It is
also
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 worth noting how women had an average of around 40% for three of the different
music
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 players, with a balance between them.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words music with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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