Doctors should be responsible for educating their patients about how to improve their health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Medical Professionals should be accountable to teach their clients ways to enhance their

health

. I agree with the statement fully, as I believe that it is the duty of a doctor to provide rational reasoning as there are many false perceptions being floated on social media regarding

health

and fitness, plus it's in the best interest of the general public regarding a healthier environment to live in for

everyone

. To start with, many social media influencers and sites have been fostering the general public regarding

health

and fitness methods.

Everyone

has a different perception, applying something which could have benefited them to

everyone

who watches their video or message. Put simply,

this

general perception can be harmful to many, as they lack proper scientific and medical methods, and most are based on outdated ways.

For instance

, many bloggers on YouTube are guiding people on vitamin intake with basic information regarding

this

subject. In

this

regard, doctors hold a paramount responsibility to tackle each patient individually, knowing their medical history, and guiding them cogently in refining themselves,

instead

of looking up things on the internet with lacking evidence.

Secondly

, physicians can help build up a healthier society for

everyone

to live in.

This

can only be possible if they emphasize

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creating an amusing environment for

thier

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their

patients to engage on any topic regarding

health

and fitness.

In other words

, be

accessable

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accessible

everyone

and share

fruitfull

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fruitful

benefits. In my viewpoint, a healthier environment is beneficial for the country,

it's

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economy and social development. To

elloborate

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elaborate

, if a community is healthier

they

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will perform better both socially and economically, having less stress, less pressure,

meager

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crimes and most importantly increased work production. Take

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example, New

Zealand

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economy has spiked up recently

due to

a surge in their work productivity.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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7Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Grammar mistakes
 

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

holistic approach
preventive measures
chronic diseases
medical interventions
healthcare professionals
consultations
dietitians
health educators
literacy skills
visual aids
digital tools
reputable online resources
community programs
ongoing support
patient outcomes
initial guidance
mitigated
follow-up consultations

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Doctors should be responsible for educating their patients about how to improve their health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

should long term job seekers in receipt of government benefits be made to do voluntary work so that they can give something back to the community?

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