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People nowadays sleep less than they used to in the past. What do you think is the reason behind this? What are the effects on individuals and people around them?

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In
this
 day and age, individuals
take
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get
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 sufficient sleep in their life span as compared to the past. Because of the latest technology
and
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such
 as mobile phones and has many Detroit effects on their health. I will articulate their causes and give feasible reasons for
this
 new trend in individuals. To commence with, one significant factor for
this
 new trend of
taking
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getting
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enough sleep because of the latest innovations
such
 as smart gadgets. They
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 society and engage them on social apps and they always want to become active on Instagram or Facebook.
For instance
, the new generation becoming night owls they prefer to sleep in the morning time and sometimes
due to
 a hectic study , routine they do not
take
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get
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 proper sleep.
Thus
,
due to
 social activities scratched their proper sleep.
Secondly
, most of the students have been studying tough subjects
such
 as medicine or technology and get bundles of assignments and presentations. They almost spend
their
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 time completing the task and gaining high marks on final exams. There are numerous effects on the human body from the deprivation of sleep.
Firstly
, their minds are not working properly like the others who get their proper sleep. The rate of dopamine decreases and leads to chronic and acute diseases
such
 as headaches and anxiety. In conclusion,
this
 new trend of not having proper sleep in their lives
due to
 excessive use of social apps leads to health problems
such
 as eye side weak and physical problems
such
 as depression and illness.
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