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Some people feel that manufacturers and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of the goods. Others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Environmental issues are the rising
concerns
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concern

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 in the world forum . Much of
debates
Correct article usage
the debates

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 about responsibility
lies
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lie

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 between suppliers or customers in reducing packaging goods. A sector of
the
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apply

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society
believe
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believes

The plural verb believe does not appear to agree with the singular subject sector. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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 that producers and supermarkets should be held accountable whilst others suppose that consumers have a big contribution by avoiding purchasing
much
Correct quantifier usage
many

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 packaging
products
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. From my perspective,
i
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I

The pronoun I should always be capitalized.

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 presume that both producers and buyers should share equal parts in protecting the
environment
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. On the one hand , there are some justifications
have
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that have

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 been proved manufacturers might have some key roles in reducing packaging
products
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.
First,
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suppliers should innovate and come up with
products
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 with
environmental
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environmentally

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 friendly alternative materials which
are recycle
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are recycled

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 and biodegradable
such
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 as paper ,
plant-based
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and plant-based

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. If even it is released into the
environment
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 after
using
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use

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, it could be
also
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 decomposed
itself
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apply

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without harmful to the
environment
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 .
Secondly
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, the charge in packaging is
also
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the
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a

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 feasible approach to minimize customers using excessive plastic
bag
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bags

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. Indeed ,the majority of people always constitute on sth with their price , so in order to pay for packaging they will have a sense of waste money which lead to
eliminate
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eliminating

The verb eliminate may be in the wrong form after the preposition to. Consider changing it to the gerund form.

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 buying them, resulting in reducing the amount of waste
ends
Correct pronoun usage
that ends

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 up at landfills.
On the other hand
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 , purchasers
also
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 take charge
in
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of

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preservation
Correct article usage
the preservation

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 nature
environment
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. New habits developed daily will make a remarkable difference.
For instance
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,
by
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apply

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bringing their own bag
while
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 shopping could limit packages back to their home .
Also
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 , they should buy the
products
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 with
least
Correct article usage
the least

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 packaging
such
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 as organic food rather than too much covering . Ideally, buyers should head to flea
market
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markets

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 with direct sales without any containerization as opposed to supermarkets where always use covering on their goods . In conclusion, both suppliers and customers should have equal responsibility in reducing packaging and protecting our
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environment

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environmen
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environment

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainability
  • Eco-friendly
  • Carbon footprint
  • Excessive packaging
  • Biodegradable materials
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Consumer advocacy
  • Environmental stewardship
  • Waste reduction
  • Recycling initiatives
  • Green practices
  • Minimalist lifestyle
  • Resource conservation
  • Sustainable consumption
  • Packaging alternatives
  • Regulatory measures
  • Ethical choices
  • Environmental impact assessment
  • Renewable resources
  • Compostable packaging
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