The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries
The given tables show the comparison of different categories of
revenue
of 5 Europe nations in 1999 and in 2004. It is noticeable that the
sales
of
coffee
in the 5 countries grew over the period provided.
In addition
, the
revenue
of bananas in the UK, Switzerland, and Denmark went up,
while
for Belgium and Sweden, they went down. In the initial year,
revenue
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the revenue
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of
coffee
in Switzerland was 3
million
Euro
, 2 times higher than that in the UK, followed by a remarkable increase to 6
million
Euro
and 20
million
Euro
respectively in the final year.
Besides
,
coffee
was sold with the highest total
sales
.
Furthermore
, the
sales
of bananas which were sold in
the
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Switzerland started at 1
million
Euro
, less than 15 times
revenue
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the revenue
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in the UK in 1999. The year 2004 witnessed a sharp climb to 5.5
million
Euro
and 47
million
Euro
in order. A more detailed look at the tables
illustrate
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that there was a slight rise in the
sales
of
coffee
in Sweden, Belgium, and Denmark, ranked from 1
million
Euro
to 2
million
Euro
in 2004. Meanwhile,
revenue
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the revenue
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of bananas in Denmark was
in
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the
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an
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upward trend from 0.6
million
Euro
in 1999 to 4
million
Euro
in 2004. Both Belgium and Sweden,
in contrast
, have
the
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revenue
which declined
around
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1
million
Euro
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade sales
  • significant growth
  • trends and patterns
  • market expansion
  • sustainable consumption
  • ethical products
  • consumer awareness
  • economic impact
  • percentage increase
  • market share
  • profit margins
  • trade initiatives
  • consumer behavior
  • retail figures
  • economic indicators
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