The first graph gives the number of passengers travelling by train in Sydney. The second graph provides information on the percentage of trains running on time.

The first graph gives the number of passengers travelling by train in Sydney. The second graph provides information on the percentage of trains running on time.
The two line graphs represent the
number
of people who use the train in Sydney and the proportion of trains that move within time respectively from 1995 to 2004.
Overall
, It can clearly be seen that the
number
of train passengers increased over the period
while
the percentage of trains that work within time saw a decrease.
To begin
with, the
number
of people who boarded the train in 1995 stood at 250
million
.
This
increased gradually to about 265
million
in the next 4 years until it peaked at 300
million
in 2001. The
number
declined the following year to 280
million
. It
then
plateaued at 280
million
for the remaining years. The percentage of trains that worked on time
on the other hand
stood at about 93% in 1995 but dropped slightly to 85% in 1997. In the next 6 years, the figures fluctuated until
it
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saw a dramatic plunge to about 72% in 2004.
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