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The lone chart below information on the satisfaction with education system in five different countries from 2010 to 2010.

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The line graph provides data about how the height of satisfaction with the education system in Australia, Japan, Germany,
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 and the USA changed, over a 20-year period, starting from 1990.
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, it can be seen that the percentage of people who were satisfied with the learning way in
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, Germany and Japan increased,
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 it decreased in Australia and U.S.A.
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, comfort balances in Japan were consistently higher over the period shown. Looking at the data sets that are incremented in more detail, it is evident that the pars of amusement with the schooling way stood at about 55% in 1990.
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this
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 trend, by 2010, it had raised to 59%, which was the highest point on the chart.
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, the proportion of people who were satisfied with the education system in Germany and
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 showed a similar trend, Raising from around 33% and 15% to 50% and 36% in 1990 and 2010, respectively.
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, which experienced the greatest increase of all countries. Turning to the remaining data sets that declined, the height of happiness with the study systems in Australia was approximately 50% in 1990.
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 figure slightly rose to 59% in 1970, dropped to 43% in 2005 and remained constant until 2010.
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, the elevation of pleasure in the U.S.A. fell from 45% in 1990 to 30% in 2010, which was the greatest decrease of all countries.

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