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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language Is In order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #reason #language #travel #work #country #someone
Learning a second
language
 gives a merit opportunity including augmenting communication
skill
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, knowledge of different
culture
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cultures
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 and so on. Meanwhile, some folks opine the reasons for those who learn
foreign
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language
 with the aim only to be able to travel or to work in
overseas
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an overseas
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country
. In
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 both sides of the debate will be explained and in my point of view, there are many reasons to learn another
language
besides
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 capable of living in
non-native
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 state. The
reasons
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reason
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 why people
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 a new speech as it offers a
beneficial
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 for those who are interested in
such
 as it improves the linguistic to response conversation in different
area
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 and
culture
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cultures
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.
In addition
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 tongue provide the ability to be flexible in adapting
on
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 different culture
as well as
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boosts confidence and understanding in facing non-familiar area.
In contrast
, people who make a statement that learning a second
language
 only to be able to go outside
country
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it
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is totally wrong since not all people have the same purposes and destiny to gain capability in
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language
. Even though, to survive in living outside
country
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, it requires to have a competency in learning their
language
 but it is not
also
 mandatory since some countries
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 that having a proficiency in English is enough.
To sum up
, I restate that learning outside of mother tongue would give the advantage to
person
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the person
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 who
learn
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 it because it hones the skill
besides
 only to be able to
living
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 overseas
country
.
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  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
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