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The difference between countries is becoming less and less evident as people all over the world wear the same fashions, watch the same TV channels, use the same brands, and have similar eating habits. Do you think that the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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The given illustration explains the method of making briThe given illustration explains the method of making
bricks
 followed by
construction
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 industry. It can be seen that the process begins with the digger used for excavating clay from the ground which is
then
 placed on the metal grid over a roller in the next step. The clay is
then
 mixed with sand and water which can either be pressed and cut into
bricks
 with the help of
wire
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a wire
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 cutter or inserted in the
mold
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mould
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 to form
bricks
.
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Afterwards
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Afterward
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,Afterward
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 the
bricks
 are placed in a drying oven for almost 28-48 hours followed by stacking
bricks
 in the
klin
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kiln
 at
moderate
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a moderate
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 temperature between 200 to
980 degree
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celsius
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Celsius
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.
Then
 the stack is placed at
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a hight
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hight
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high
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 temperature ranging from 870 to 1300
degree
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celcius
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celsius
.
Moreover
, the
bricks
 are
then
 placed in a cooling chamber for 48-72 hours and
then
 they are ready for packaging and delivery.
Overall
, the whole method of manufacturing
bricks
 involves seven distinct steps.
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