The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts and the table give
the
information about the number of Ashdown Correct article usage
apply
Museum
guests in the year
before and the year
after it was renovated and the results of surveys from respondent
to measure their Fix the agreement mistake
respondents
satisfied
when visiting the Replace the word
satisfaction
museum
. Overall
, the renovated museum
was 20% more satisfied than before being refurbished which attracted 18,000 more visitors.
First of all, the number of visitant
to Ashdown Change to a plural noun
visitants
Museum
showed 74,000 people in the year
before upgrading the design then
after the restoration was finished it derived considerably higher visitors which obtained 92,000 people.
In addition
, before museum
Correct article usage
the museum
being
Wrong verb form
was
modernization
, the pie chart showed 40% Replace the word
modernised
guest
was dissatisfied and satisfied in the Change preposition
of guest
year
after took place of dissatisfied which was the largest percentage and dissatisfied
lessened to 15%. Replace the word
dissatisfaction
In addition
, very dissatisfied declined to 5%. Notwithstanding very satisfied rose for
20% to 35%, there was still the same amount of no response to the survey at 5%.Change preposition
from
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