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With a fast pace of modern life more and more people are turning towards fast food for their main meals. Do you think the advantages outweigh disadvantages.

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In
this
 contemporary era, where men and women both are working, it is difficult to stick with traditional food.
Therefore
, for their convenience, people tend to consume fast
foods
 more than their homemade meals. In my opinion, the trend among modern societies for junk consumption is detrimental to their well-being.
To begin
 with, undoubtedly, owing to a hectic schedule, it is hard to cook fresh snacks on a daily basis, so pupils are more dependent on the packed snack or
the
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readily available eatables. As both parents are working, and because of nuclear family trends prevailing in societies, there are no elders at home, who can help their children with the house chores and especially in the cooking. In India, in previous times, folks live with their parents, so in the morning, when they went to their jobs or schools, they got tiffins prepared at home by elders having fresh vegetables, pulses etcetera; and similar things happen when they came back, they had well ready food. But nowadays, in the quest of earning more and more money, people are doing jobs abroad, or in far places from their home cities, where they have to depend on fast
foods
due to
 their convenience, taste and ease.
Furthermore
,
foods
 and vegetables are perishable in nature, so it is hard to keep them edible for a long time, so preservatives have been added to them, which have negative impacts on our health in the future times. Preservatives are used to keep foodstuffs fresh and to maintain their nutrients. By consuming
such
 cuisines, we are getting nutritional food, but on the other side, artificial content added to them will affect our organs like kidneys and liver, It is a kind of slow poison which does not have an immediate effect,
however
, its results would be experienced after 5, or 10 years, or maybe later. In the end, I would like to say that physical strength is more important than money, so it is the responsibility of every individual to incline towards homemade eatables as with consistent consumption of street
foods
, we are playing with our own fitness.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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