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Some believe that traffic problems in cities can best be resolved by investing in urban infrastructure while others feel there are superior solutions. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

Traffic
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 congestion is an increasing concern in cities. To solve
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 problem,
people
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 think that urban infrastructure is the greatest way
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,some feel that there are some supreme solutions available. In my opinion, both perspectives have their own benefits. On the one hand, to discuss the superior solutions, there are some methods that should be followed.
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 as knowledge should be given about the rules and regulations of
traffic
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 laws, the government should make strict policies for violation of laws and impose charges that are not easy to handle like cancellation of licence or imprisonment for a short time in jail.
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, it should be
assured
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 that proper
traffic
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 training
should be
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is
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 given to the
traffic
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 police, and they
followed
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follow
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 it as their duty. They should be fined or suspended if they do not fulfil their responsibility.
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, management should introduce job opportunities in rural areas so they stay at their places and the crowd will be prevented.  
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,
traffic
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 jams waste many hours of the day, which can impact daily activities. To sort out these difficulties, authorities should take the initiative to develop roads, flyovers, and underpasses and
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 the government should give awareness to
people
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 to make houses in horizontal areas rather than constructing skyscrapers.
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, investors should invest in projects like underground railways which are  convenient for
people
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 to travel easily and the congestion of roads will be prevented.
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, in ,Japan
people
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 use bullet trains to travel in cities in a very fast and convenient way. In conclusion,
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 an infrastructure project may seem like an easy solution to deal with the plight of
traffic
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,
this
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 is not the ultimate solution to the problem. The other potential measures will require decisive government action and it takes a lot of time to apply. So, both tendencies are required to overcome these situations.

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coherence and cohesion
Improve the logical flow of ideas by clearly linking sentences and paragraphs. Use linking words such as 'firstly', 'secondly', and 'in addition'.
task response
Include a stronger introduction that clearly states both sides of the argument and your opinion. This helps guide the reader.
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Provide more specific examples to support your points. Examples help clarify your ideas and make your argument stronger.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure your conclusion summarizes the main points and clearly states your opinion, reinforcing your argument.
task achievement
You have identified important solutions for traffic problems, showing understanding of the topic.
task achievement
The essay provides different viewpoints, demonstrating your ability to discuss both sides effectively.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban infrastructure
  • traffic congestion
  • bottlenecks
  • public transportation systems
  • cycling lanes
  • pedestrian pathways
  • telecommuting
  • smart traffic management
  • AI and IoT
  • carpooling
  • ride-sharing services
  • vehicular traffic
  • alternative means of transport
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