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Technology is becoming progressively universal. In the fullness of time, classroom teachers will be totally substituted for technology. Do you agree or disagree

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Technology
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 is improving globally.
Technology
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 will help
students
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 in learning and understanding in a faster
ways
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 we can ever think of.
Technology
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also
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 helps
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 to have access to different
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. The use of
internet
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 has served as a means of sensitisation and
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 a means of improving learning in the world.
Technology
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have
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 a greater influence on children by helping them to be attentive and easily understand what they are being taught. It is believed that children learn faster from what they see and from what they hear than being taught abstractly,
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 has helped a lot of
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 to have an
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 result.
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, chemistry is understood better when they are being explained with videos and
audios
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as well as
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 practicals which has made a lot of
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to
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love the subject more.
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,
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 do excellently well when taught with audio and video clips. The use of
technology
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 helps
students
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 to have access to different
school
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 of thoughts globally which helps to widen their
knowledge
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.
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 has been supported by a lot of scholars globally.
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, in
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 the definition of nursing by different
theorist
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 has helped
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 to apply
knowledge
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 in the practical care of patients.
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,
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 has globally
being
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 in use by both
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 and
the
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teachers
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 improving their
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on
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 diverse ways of treatment. In conclusion, teachers
replaced
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 by
technology
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 is a positive way of revolution in
educational
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 system.
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,
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not only improve understanding but
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 widen the
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 of the
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 globally.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • progressively
  • substituted
  • prevalent
  • crucial
  • enhance
  • support
  • guidance
  • interaction
  • personal touch
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