Some people think the government should pay for health care and education but other people claim that it is the individual's responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

Numerous
people
reckon government should pay for our
health
and
education
. Other
people
say that we should be responsible for ourselves. Everyone has their own opinion.
This
essay
discuss
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both views. And I give my own opinion. So, some
people
are always provided by the
state
and pensions are provided and other expenses are covered by the
state
.
Conversely
, some believe that the government should pay for their
health
, their children's
education
, and their own. Of course the
state
pay for its citizens. Because they are doing everything for its citizens, but of course if the
state
can afford it. But some believe they should pay for
health
care or
education
. Of course,
such
thoughts come from rich
people
. because they don't have to pay the government. or they say that we are responsible for ourselves,
that is
, not all rich
people
have
such
an opinion,
this
also
comes from ordinary
people
. In conclusion, I consider the
state
should pay for everything for its citizens. if a rich country. but
otherwise
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the
health
and
education
fee should be waived.
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