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Some people think the government should pay for health care and education but other people claim that it is the individual's responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

#people #government #health #care #education #responsibility
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Numerous
people
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 reckon government should pay for our
health
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 and
education
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. Other
people
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 say that we should be responsible for ourselves. Everyone has their own opinion.
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 both views. And I give my own opinion. So, some
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 are always provided by the
state
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 and pensions are provided and other expenses are covered by the
state
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.
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, some believe that the government should pay for their
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, their children's
education
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, and their own. Of course the
state
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 pay for its citizens. Because they are doing everything for its citizens, but of course if the
state
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 can afford it. But some believe they should pay for
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 care or
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. Of course,
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 thoughts come from rich
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. because they don't have to pay the government. or they say that we are responsible for ourselves,
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, not all rich
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 have
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 an opinion,
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 comes from ordinary
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. In conclusion, I consider the
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 should pay for everything for its citizens. if a rich country. but
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 the
health
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 and
education
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 fee should be waived.
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