The health benefits of physical activities are well known. Despite this, many people do not exercise regularly. What are the reasons for this? What could be done to encourage them exercise regularly?

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developer applications around the world have already made the campaign to be aware of the
health
issue and encourage their community to carry out
activities
that augment
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health
benefits including physical
activities
.
This
essay will discuss why some folks rarely
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perform work-out
activities
and how the
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the technology developer in order to push them to preserve their strength. To start with, there are many applications which promote
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up
physical
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condition,
for instance
, the fitness app
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provides illustrated fitness videos to educate their subscriptions to exercise
sport
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activity as it is shown on the video in the app, in spite of
this
there are still people who do not perform frequently,
therefore
the application has the reminder feature to their users to undertake the physical exercises,
however
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the feature seems not effective as the surveys conducted by the apps it explained that the users do not have much time to implement work-out
activities
In addition
, the
government
has already been aware of the issue and has discussed
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the
ministry
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of
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health
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people who do not care
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their
health
. The solution from the discussion generates that they have to make more
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of
activities
which relate to
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issue
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and
also
they have to support the technologist to innovate the
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apps with the aim of
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community
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to utilize the app
To sum up
, the
government
and their parties have to maintain and give
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and knowledge to the inhabitant to look after their
health
as well as
encourage the programmer to sustain innovation as a means to care
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the community
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