The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given chart depicts the percentage of Australian people’s habit in
tea
and
coffee
buying and drinking in five cities.
Overall
, most of
citizens
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the citizens
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from five cities consume
coffee
or
tea
from café with
the
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a
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percentage
is
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above 50% in every city whilst Hobart
have
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has
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the highest percentage at 65%. Except for Adelaide, the highest consumption is instant
coffee
.
While
,
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the lowest type of
coffee
and
tea
consumed by citizens from five cities is fresh
coffee
which is under 45% for each city. In Hobart,
melbourne
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Melbourne
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and Sidney, the popular habit is going to
coffee
for buying a cup of
coffee
or
tea
.
While
in Brisbane, the habit of going to
coffee
shop
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shops
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and buying instant
coffee
is quite
populer
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popular
with the difference
is
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being
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only 1-2
percents
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percent
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.
In contrast
,
a
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half of Adelaide’s people tend to buy instant
coffee
remaining less than 40% who bought fresh
coffee
or went to café.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words tea, coffee with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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