The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the stages and

equipment used in the cement making process,

and how cement is used to produce concrete for

building purposes.

Summarise the information by selecting and

reporting the main features, and make

comparisons where relevant.
The diagram gives information
onthe
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on the
steps and materials of making
cement
abd
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and
concrete respectively.
Overall
, 5 steps and 4 ingredients
such
as limestones, clay, heat and bags are needed to produce
cement
and 4 things are used to make concrete.
To begin
with the stages of
cement
production, in the first, limestones and clay are crushed through
crusher
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a crusher
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and
this
stage results in powder.
Second,
it goes through a mixer and
then
heat is added
in
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the rotating heater. After that, it is
grinded
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ground
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by
grinder
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.
These
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process results in
Cement
and the
last
step is to pack them in bags.
On the other hand
, making concrete is simpler than
cement
production. 15% of
cement
, 10% of water, 25% of sand and 50% of gravel
wich
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are small rocks put together in
mixer
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a mixer
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and
then
are
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shaked. From these tools, we can get concrete which is utilized to build buildings.
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