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The two maps below raod access to a city hospital in2007 and in 2010.

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The two maps illustrate the information about the
road
 connectivity to a
city
 hospital in the year
of
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2007 and 2010.
Overall
, it can be seen that in 2007,
city
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the city
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 hospital was connected
with
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by
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 two main roads
such
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apply
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as ring
road
 and
city
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a city
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Road
 and It has
sparate
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separate
carparking
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car parking
 for
Staff
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the Staff
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 and
public
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the public
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.
However
, in 2010. there was a
significan
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significant
 improvement in roads and other facilities
suchas
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such as
 there was
sparate
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separate
 car parking for
public
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the public
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 and
Staff
 and replaced with new circular roads.
According to
 the maps, the ring
road
in
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on
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 the
nourth
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north
 Side and the
city
road
in
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on
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Soulth
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South
 Side remained
same
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the same
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 For both years, but there was
a
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an
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 improvement in
carparking
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car parking
, in 2007, the Space for car parking allocated for both
staff
 and
public
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the public
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 as compared with 2010, the Space was individually allocated for both public parking and for
Staff
 parking. In 2007, there was only one crossing
road
 and connected with only
hospital
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the hospital
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Road
.
However
 in 2010
city
 roaf connected with
bus
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a bus
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 station hospital
road
 and public car parking.
Bus
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The bus
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 station was
buil
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built
 differently
in
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on
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 the west Side of the
coty
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city
 hospital
where
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whereas
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 in 2007 it was behind the
hosptical
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hospital
road
.
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