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Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a jobb straight after shcool. Discuss both views.

#people #university #college #route #career #jobb #shcool
Education
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 finding your future career.
Although
 many
people
 see that following a line in the
education
 field could lead to
a
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 best opportunity
of
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for
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job
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a job
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,
other
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others
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 argue that it is better to get a position straight
ofter
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after
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 graduation. In
this
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 I will discuss both sides of
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the arguments
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arguments
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argument
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 and
giving
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relevent
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relevant
 to my life experience. Studying at the
university
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stundents
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students
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the
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opportunity to build
his
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or
her
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their
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 future career.
In other words
, students could get experiences in the field which they
hove
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have
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 chosen to follow since they work on
thesis
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a thesis
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 and graduation project.Many
university
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universities
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,
for example
, allow students to choose
wether
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whether
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 they want to do exchange study in
different
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a different
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 country or
doing
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do
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 their research in their country which could help them to improve their ability to study abroad and experience
differnt
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different
culture
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cultures
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 and different
workplace
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workplaces
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 when they do their
intership
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internship
internships
 which is essential as a part of their completed study.
Eventhough
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Even though
 a large
percentages
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percentage
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 of students that following a route at the
university
 lead to
better
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a better
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 career, other think that getting a
job
stright
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straight
 away could be better. Getting a
job
 after graduation from school is very important for most
of
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people
 since they have no budget to complete
it
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apply
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to
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a higher
education
. many
people
, nowadays, are suffering from
finincial
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financial
 problems
due to
economic
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the economic
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 crisis in
the
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developing countries, so those
people
 are not able to pay for their
university
tution
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tuition
 fees.
Consecountly
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Consequently
, they prefer to look for a
job
 after finishing
the
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high school to help their families
finincialy
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financially
 and to be part of
sociaty
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society
. But if those
people
 are given a chance to complete their
education
, many would continue not only to
undergraduation
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undergraduate
 but
als
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also
 even postgraduation. In
concusion
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conclusion
,
Although
 most
of
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people
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the people
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 prefer to get a higher certificate, a big percentage may not be able to participate
due to
 many reasons one of them
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being finincial
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finincial
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financial
 assistance.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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