The chart below gives information about how families on one country spent their weekly income 1968 and in 2018

The chart below gives information about how families on one country spent their weekly income 1968 and in 2018
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data about spending weekly money in a certain country in 1968 and 2018.
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demonstrate
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8 various usages of families in 2 particular years.
Highest
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figure was 35 percentages in
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1968. Personal goods
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lowest
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number in 2018 and 1968, people spent only about 5 %. For households families had
weekly
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a weekly
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income
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10 % in both years.
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, housing, clothing and footwear had 10 %.
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families allocated between and transport
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used of money 10 % in 1968. For
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year the percentage of leisure expenses surged sharply nearly 10 %.
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, small changes occurred
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40 years later. Most of all money was spent
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leisure (just over 20% ) and housing (just under 20%)
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only about 5% were used for fuel and power. Clothing and footwear outrace personal goods a little bit. People bought household goods around 10%.
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, all individuals use
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their weekly income for transport around 15%
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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