The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in

2005 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The given pie graph illustrates the percentage of online
sales
for retail shops in Canada in the different two years, 2005 and 2010.
Overall
, there were changes in the proportion for different sectors over the examined period.
While
the figures for food and beverages and
also
video games increased, the figures for the other two sectors fell. The percentage of video games accounted for 18% of total online
sales
for retail sectors, compared to the figure of 22% for food and beverages in 2005. In the next five years, the figure for video games increased significantly to 23%.
Besides
, the
sales
of food and beverage took up 32%, which made it rank first in the total of online
sales
.
However
, online shopping
sales
of electronics and appliances and home furnishings saw a remarkable decline. There was a drop in the percentage of online electronic and appliances from 35% in 2005 to 30% in 2010.
Similarly
,
this
period
also
witnessed a slight fall in online
sales
of home furniture, which was a one in ten % decrease.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words sales with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • distribution
  • percentage
  • sector
  • sales figures
  • revenue
  • growth
  • decline
  • stable
  • significant
  • leading
  • least performing
  • comparison
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • online shopping
  • retail sectors
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