You work for a children’s home which needs volunteers to help at weekends. Write to the the local newspaper requesting that they publicise the vacancies. You should include details of what is required of the applicants and explain the ways in which both volunteers and children migt benefit

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Dear manager I am writing

this

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letter to request you

about publishing

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our subject in many areas of the first paper of the newspaper which the subject is

volunteers

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to help at the weekends in the

children

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home

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. Because in the next few weeks, we have many special events around our community.

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. for the Canada Day action. we have to decorate our

home

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, so the

volunteers

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should know about the special features of that day to teach

children

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and help them. ,

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they should paint something on the wall. Already

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considered that should be a hard job, but after finishing you will be proud of yourself.

secondly

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, we are chosen by the local mayor to perform a ceremony related to the growth of

children

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in the downtown.

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this

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issue, all the

volunteers

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should take care of all of the

children

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during the event.

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at the end

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of the ceremony, our

children

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home

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manager will choose one of the best

volunteers

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and he has an attractive gift for

volunteers

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. in the end, we should organize a game party for

children

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with their parents. The number of participants is too much and

this

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event is located in a backyard

home

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, so the

volunteers

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must put temporary walls around the game party.

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, during the game party

children

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play with their parents and

volunteers

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will play the role of arbitrator. I look forward to hearing from you as soon as possible. Yours faithfully Steve West

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task response

Ensure clear and concise task response addressing the requirements for volunteers and children's benefits.

coherence cohesion

Improve coherence and cohesion by organizing the content into distinct paragraphs and using appropriate transition words.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

247 words

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