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Some people work for the same organisation for a lifetime. Others think it is better to work for different organisations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There are various cases when individuals
labor
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 in the same
place
 in their entire working careers,
however
, other
people
 have the idea that it's
preffered
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preferred
 to work in different companies. Staying in a single job would surely ensure stability and a comfortable
way
 of
life
.
In
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 the other hand, changing workplaces would probably get
people
 a more
intresting
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interesting
 lifestyle in which they surely meet more
people
 and could get
involve
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 in different areas of expertise. In my
opinion
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 shifting jobs is the better option. When working in the same company for an entire
life
, employees get many guarantees.
For instance
, workers get better
priveleges
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privileges
,
such
 as more vacation days and a margin for making small mistakes since they have been in the same venue for several years.
Nevertheless
, they get trapped in a comfort zone, which isn't something bad, yet working at a constant
place
 for many years could become dull and tedious.
For example
,
laboring
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 at one
place
 for twenty years isn't something that
sound
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 attractive. Staying in a single
place
 has more disadvantages than advantages.
On the contrary
, switching
workpleaces
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workplaces
 would undoubtedly get
people
 an intriguing
way
 of
life
.
Certainly
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 a
life
 with different jobs would get
people
 less guarantees and there might be moments where employees get stressed. Despite
this
,
setteling
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settling
 in new places could open
people
 to new experiences and to learning more from the places they work in.
Besides
, workers will meet new acquaintances that could help them progress in the future. Shifting enterprise takes
people
 to an
atractive
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attractive
way
 of
life
.
To sum up
,
wheras
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whereas
 staying in the same workplace gives individuals a comfortable
way
 of style, changing jobs is clearly more
intresting
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interesting
. In my opinion, it is much healthier for
human
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a human
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 being to change their
way
 of
life
 constantly than to stick
in
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 the same routine for decades.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Organisational loyalty
  • Career longevity
  • Professional development
  • Skill diversification
  • Cultural adaptability
  • Professional network
  • Work-life balance
  • Job stability
  • Career mobility
  • Career trajectory
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