Many government spend a lot of money on art.Some people think this investment is art is necessary,but others say the better spent on improving health and education.Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

It is irrefutable that
art
plays a valuable role in every nation's history and culture.It is argued by some individuals that the
government
should spend
money
on
art related
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matters ,
whereas
,others disagree and assert that high authorities should pour
money
into public services.
This
essay agrees that
government
funds should
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to
public
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the public
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sector
because
this
will lead to
betterment
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the betterment
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of
health
and
education
.
Although
art
is a very important part of every country,there are some essential sectors which require investment the most.
In other words
,
people
of any country cannot succeed unless they get
education
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an education
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and have
healthy
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body.In several parts of the
world
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people
are not able to get
good
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educational
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and access to medical facilities
due to
which they do not get jobs and suffer from several
life threatening
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diseases.It is
therefore
agreed that to overcome
this
government
should pour some
money
into these sectors.
For instance
,in India,
government
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gives more preference to
people
's
health
and
education
because they know that these two factors are
the
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important factors for any nation's success.
On the other hand
,it is believed by some
people
that
government
handouts must be utilised by
art
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sector
so that these organisations can thrive in
the
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society.Despite
this
,there are a plethora of other financial sources which play a crucial role in the development of
art
.To explain,there are plenty of
art
museums which are visited by national and international tourists by buying tickets which is a great source of income.
Moreover
,investors
also
do come forward to invest in
this
in order to make
money
for the betterment of
art
and history.
Thus
this
essay
disagress
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disagrees
disagree
that
government
spendings
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should be used for arts. In conclusion,even though
art
requires financial aid from
government
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the government
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,it has many other ways for funds as tickets which tourists tend to buy for every single visit to
such
art
museums etc and huge investments which investors do for
these
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sector
's growth.
Hence
it is apparent that
government
must consider educational institutions and
health
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the health
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sector
to spend
money
on since good
health
and
education
stimulate
people
to go
froward
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forward
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in their lives for the growth of their nation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural legacy
  • nation's history and identity
  • fosters creativity
  • economic benefits
  • tourism
  • art markets
  • quality of life
  • cultural understanding
  • productive population
  • personal and economic growth
  • fundamental for long-term development
  • well-being
  • immediate tangible benefits
  • abstract benefits
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