Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Several
people
belief
that strict Replace the word
believe
punishment
for driving offences are
the solution to decreasing Change the verb form
is
traffic
accident
. On the other hand
, others argue that other measures
would be more efficient in increasing road
safety. Both arguments has
potential and threat. To my way of thinking. other Change the verb form
have
measures
is
more creative than strict Change the verb form
are
punishment
. So, it has more benefit
for all parties, either for the law enforcer or for the Fix the agreement mistake
benefits
driver
.
In current
era, Add an article
the current
humanity
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the humanity
approach
is more popular than repressive
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the repressive
approach
. To make people
obey the rules, it is need
other Change the verb form
needs
measures
, besides
strict punishment
, that more
humanist. Add a missing verb
are more
One
of the examples of the measures
is giving reward
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rewards
for
whom obey the limitation of speed. Change preposition
to
People
will competing
to drive under the speed Change the verb form
compete
be competing
limitation
to get the reward. Replace the word
limit
This
condition can decreasing
the possibility of Change the verb form
decrease
be decreasing
traffic
accident
. Fix the agreement mistake
accidents
Besides
, the other measures
is
the policy of government like building facilities on the Change the verb form
are
road
. Specifically, street lighting is very important to make sure the safety of the road
.
Nowadays, repressive
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a repressive
approach
has been started to leave by modern society. One
of the examples from repressive
Add an article
the repressive
approach
is strict punishment
. People
belief
that strict Replace the word
believe
punishment
cannot make people
afraid to committing
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commit
the
offence, especially for driving Correct article usage
an
offence
. Even though the Fix the agreement mistake
offences
driver
get
Change the verb form
gets
the
strict Correct article usage
a
punishment
, it is not guarantee
the Change the verb form
does not guarantee
driver
not
repeat the offence. Change the verb form
does not
did not
Moreover
, if the offender has lot
of money. So, it Change the article
a lot
is need
other Change the verb form
needs
measures
to make the driver
obey the rules on the road
.
There are two way
of thinking to Fix the agreement mistake
ways
decreasing
Change the verb form
decrease
traffic
accident
. The first Fix the agreement mistake
accidents
one
is strict punishment
and the second one
is other measures
. Both of them has a
purpose Correct article usage
the
to
decreasing Change preposition
of
traffic
accident
. Actually, in
Change preposition
at
the
present, strict Correct article usage
apply
punishment
cannot guarantee the offender do the same mistake. On the other hand
, other measures
that more
creative can make Add a missing verb
are more
people
competing
to always obey the Wrong verb form
compete
traffic
rules. In my opinion, other measures
is
more effective Change the verb form
are
to
reducing Change preposition
in
traffic
the
Correct article usage
apply
accident
than strict punishment
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