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In some countries, ordinary citizens are allowed to keep a gun in their houses. Some people think this is a good idea, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Once there was a time when
guns
 and other weapons were supposed to be possessed by only a few elites and relevant people. At present, there exist some countries, where inhabitants are allowed to have a
gun
 in their
homes
 regardless of the debate whether to have it or not.
This
 essay disagrees with the view to keep a
gun
 in
homes
 owing to its various cons rather than the pros. Peoples usually prefer to keep a
gun
 in their
homes
 considering it as their right citing multiple reasons.
This
 is a very common
practice
 in the less developed areas that are more vulnerable to law and order situation, where snatching, and robbery is very common. Since People don’t want to lose their valuable assets like mobiles, cash, and purses, and
hence
 consider having a
gun
 for their resistance and even use it when applicable for
self-defense
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.
For instance
, in Karachi Pakistan, there has been a remarkable reduction in the crime rate once the public used
guns
while
 protecting themselves from robbery.
However
, the trend of having
guns
 in the home needs to be opposed and discouraged. Since
such
practice
 tends to turn the countries into a state of lawlessness, and no one bothers to follow the rule of law.
Furthermore
,
such
 patterns are supposed to have detrimental effects on young people as well, since they
practice
 what they see around them.
This
practice
 not only threatens the peace of societies but
also
 gives birth to numerous ills of societies like violation, and extremism.
For example
, there has been a sharp increase in mass shooting incidents in the USA where it is permitted by law to have a
gun
 in the
homes
.
To conclude
, there should be a complete ban on having
guns
 in the home, since there might be a few advantages of it but
such
 practices tend to harm the system in the long run and
hence
 should be discouraged to the full extent.
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