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The maps below show the centre of a small twon called Islip is it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the centre of a small twon called Islip is it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The figures illustrate the map of Islip
town
, which the first
one
 shows now, and the second
one
it
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apply
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is a map of the development of the
future
town
.
Overall
, now in the
city
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,city
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 there is just a main
road
 and a lot of
shops
 with a big
park
 and
a
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the
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 countryside. For
future
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the future
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plan
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plans
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, the number of roads will increase, some
shops
 will be destroyed and new houses will be built. Now, in the centre of the
town
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,town
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 we just have
one
 main
road
 with
two
dead end
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dead-end
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 streets.
However
, in the
future
 the main
road
 which is connected east to west of the
city
 will change as a pedestrian, and
dual
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a dual
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 carriageway will be built,
one
 of them will connect the
two
dead end
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dead-end
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 streets to each other, another carriageway, the countryside will demolish and build the other
road
.
Therefore
, in the
future
city
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,city
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 we will have
dual
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a dual
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 carriageway plus
one
 pedestrian. For the buildings in the
town
, we have
two
 line
shops
, which are located in the north and south of the main
road
, the
shops
 which are in the north of
main
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the main
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road
 will be destroyed and
bus
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the bus
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 station, shopping centre, car
park
 and new houses will be built. For connecting
two
dead end
Add a hyphen
dead-end
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 streets in the south of the
city
, the size of the
park
 will decrease and some houses will be built
besides
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beside
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 the school and
park
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, one, future, city, road, shops, park, two with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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