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The graph below shows electricity production in France between 1980 and 2012.

The graph below shows electricity production in France between 1980 and 2012.
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The line chart presents the development of
electricity
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 generation volume supplied from the 4 different
energy
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 sources, over the period from 1980 to 2012, in France. It is obvious that nuclear
power
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 took an increasingly critical role in the past 32 years and became the most significant source of
electricity
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 production in 2012.
By contrast
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, renewable sources always accounted for the smallest portion of generated
power
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 in the same period. In 1980, the output from thermal
energy
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 was the highest, comparing the other
energy
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 sources, around 120
TW-h
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. Nuclear and Hydroelectric
power
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 were both approximately 70
TW-h
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. As for renewable
energy
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, there was negligible impact on
electricity
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 generation.
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, nuclear
power
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 overtook thermal
power
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 and rose to 100
TW-h
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, only 1 year later. After
the
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32 years, nuclear
electricity
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 has become the primary generation source and increased to more than 400
TW-h
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.
on the contrary
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, thermal
energy
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 continuously dropped to less than 50 KW-h. Hydroelectric
power
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 fluctuated on a small scale between 50 to 70
TW-h
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 in
this
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 period. Regarding renewable
electricity
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, it was always rising but still the least
energy
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 resource, up to 30 KW-h.
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