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Children are generally more successful in foreign language studies than adults. Thus, it is better to learn languages in childhood. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Learning foreign languages is more common in every country around the world, which is useful for both
children
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 and adults who really need them to communicate and study in foreign countries. Some ideas claim that it is better to learn languages in childhood than in middle age. I completely agree with
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 statement because of brain function and
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 management in
children
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's
life
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.
To begin
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 with,
children
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 have a good brain to on catch up lessons very quickly. A child seems
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 remember a wide range of lessons and even the hardest things,
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 as vocabulary and grammar a in short period of
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.
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, adults try hard to record all words in their brains.
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, when both older and young learners are doing exercises at the same
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, the young ones might find a solution faster than the older learners because the later ages take extra
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 to solve it.
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,
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 have enough
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 to concentrate on their study rather than their own
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. It means that they get financial support from their parents without experiencing any stress.
Children
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 go to school daily and enjoy studying with friends, and they come back home. Unlike
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, some older people have to face difficult situations and stress as they must find a job to earn money to maintain their education journey.
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, a lack of
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 might arise and
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 their learning period. In conclusion, I believe it is better to start learning languages in childhood compared to adults if they want to improve their knowledge effectively because of
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brain function and
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-consuming.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cognitive development
  • neuroplasticity
  • critical period
  • language acquisition
  • linguistic proficiency
  • phonetic articulation
  • bilingualism
  • multilingual
  • immersion
  • pedagogy
  • pronunciation
  • sociolinguistics
  • accent reduction
  • retention
  • cultural assimilation
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