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The gap between the rich and the poor is widening very fast. What are the causes and effects of this widening gap? You may give solutions based on your knowledge and experience.

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The difference in the level of living between loaded
people
 and the poor is being increased rapidly. in
this
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 we are going to discuss reasons, influences and represent Solutions on it.
While
 a handful of
people
 are job owners and businessmen, the majority of
people
 are employees or simple workers and are getting paid
with
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the lowest salary.
Therefore
 they cannot compete with the inflation rate,
however
, their employers won't get affected since they manage it by applying raises on fees for their products or services.
Hence
,
this
 issue affects the life of
middle-leveled
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 and
low-leveled
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 ones most The very first consequences of
this
, are hopelessness and depression. A long-term feeling of desiring and not achieving makes individuals disappointed and stops them from attempting and growing. From my point of view, it's the responsibility of the government to put
people
 in charge who are educated and efficient to improve the economy.
In addition
, sufficient base rate raise must be applied
according to
 the inflation. In conclusion,
this
 problem can have more catastrophic downsides in the future and if we don't proceed soon enough we will have to face the results.
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