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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparision where relevant

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparision where relevant
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The two maps describe the
road
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 accessibility to a hospital which is located in a
city
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 in the year
of
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apply
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2007 and 2010. The shape of roads and some infrastructures
such
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 as
bus
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 stations and parking lots had been changed
through
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over
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 four years.
To begin
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 in 2007, 6
bus
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 stations were
seperately
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separately
 placed both the east and the west sides of the hospital
road
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, respectively 3
bus
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 ones.
Also
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, a parking spot was located only
one
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once
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, so
staff
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 and
public
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the public
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 used it together.
On
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In
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the
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contrast, in 2010, roundabouts were added to not only the north but
also
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 the south of the hospital
road
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. These made people
to
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move both sides of them conveniently. Plus,
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the
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public and
staff
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 parked their cars
by
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apply
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seperately
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separately
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so that
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that
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apply
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pblic
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public
 could use a parking lot which was near the
city
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 hospital and
gate
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the gate
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 of it headed to
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city
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the city
a city
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 hospital and the cars of
staff
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 could
parked
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park
be parked
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 at the
staff
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 car park which
also
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 had a door forwarded to a ring
road
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. Another differentiation is the
bus
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 stop. 6
bus
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 stops had been removed and one big
bus
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 station was established on the
westsouth
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west south
west-south
 of
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a
the
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city
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 hospital.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, city, bus, staff with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure, development, expansion, accessibility, comparative analysis, layout, direction, emergency services, facilities, pedestrian paths, urban development, strategic planning
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