In the graph below, we have graph that shows in percentage changing patterns of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the United Kingdom.

In the graph below, we have graph that shows in percentage changing patterns of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the United Kingdom.
In the
graph
below, we have
graph
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a graph
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that shows in percentage changing patterns of domestic
access
to modern technology in homes in the United Kingdom. Generally, it has different patterns that
shows
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some technological tendencies within a certain period. More clearly, the
graph
starts
from
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1996 and ends
on
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2003, on another dimension of the
graph
it has
percentage
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a percentage
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from zero to 100 %. There are four positions of technology, which are CD player, Mobile phone, Home computer and Internet
access
. The most popular technology is the CD player which
growth
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from 60 % to 80 plus from 1996 to 2003, and the diagonal line is quite straight. On the opposite side to the highest point located in the chart is Internet
access
.
In addition
, it rises only to about 40 % of all
chart
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.
Nevertheless
, the interesting fact,
that
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the
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Internet
access
is the only point that starts from 1998 and it means that we can see when it has invented or
started
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be in use in the UK. The
last
two points have average levels, but the dynamic changing line of mobile
phone
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phones
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shows that it has more popular at
the
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a
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specific period, but sometimes not.
In addition
, it is less popular
from
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CD
player
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players
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to
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apply
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10-15 %.
Home
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The home
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computer is on 3d place in our chart and it like the average technology-growing straight and fast
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, access with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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