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Many claim that the fast food industry had a negative effect on environment, eating habit and families. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many individuals believe that the company that produces takeout meals had a detrimental impact on society, the manner of eating and families.I agree with
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 view,and
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 essay will discuss my position in detail. On the one hand, ready-made feed relieves the stress of cooking for a lot of people . The availability of junk helps folks to satisfy their hunger on time without the need to prepare cuisine themselves.
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, MC Donald's and Subway's bread industry work round the clock just to provide satisfactory meals for their customers.
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,there are negative consequences of
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 trend on the environment, the way people eat and families.
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,the convenience dishes made by fast drink restaurants can be detrimental to the health of the customers. Enhancing ingredients
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 as sweeteners and preservatives are added to the meal to give a good taste,
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; taking too much of these may cause health issues like diabetes and heart disease condition.
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,some of the fast meat does not contain adequate nutrients needed by the body,
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 the community keep patronizing the shops that sell it.
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 is because of its satiety effect, and
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 may prevent society especially children from eating a balanced diet.
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,it can result in malnutrition.
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,my cousin's eating habits have changed since she has been staying with a close relative because they don't eat homemade snacks. In conclusion, takeaway foodstuff is convenient and easily accessible because of its availability in the community.
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,I agree that its effect is detrimental to the environment, eating habits and families.
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