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Some people believe that sports subjects should be removed from school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #sports #subjects #school #curriculum
curriculum is
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 vital part of education and it must be decided with extreme caution. Some people believe that
sport
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 subject
are
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usless
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useless
 and not be
the
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part of
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 curriculum;
however
, I argue that
sports
 are crucial for a balanced
life
, so I disagree with
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 that
sports
 subjects may not the part of
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curriculm
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curriculum
.
This
 essay intends to discuss the
importancde
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importance
 of
sport
 in
anyones
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anyone
anyone's
life
. There are myriad advantages of
sports
curriculm
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curriculums
 as they significantly
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 the health of human beings.
For example
, research in The United States proved that students who enrolled in a school with
sports
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curriculm
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curriculum
 demonstrate more effective
result
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results
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 as compared to those students who get admitted
in
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 traditional schools,
thus
,
this
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sports
 in
ones
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life
. Without
such
sport
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sports
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practices
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 we may turn our new generations
in
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 robotics as they may not
able
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 to live
lively
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 without
fears
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. Many
advance
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 nations know the importance of
sport
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 subjects and
encourages
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 their population to practice
sports
 on
daily
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a daily
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 basis by introducing
the
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free
sports
 clubs.
For instance
, Japan has
introduuced
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introduced
 various free
sports
 clubs for schools where students
practics
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practice
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 and get mentally fresh, albeit a little tired,
as a
result
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 they become more productive.
Following
this
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it is clear that
sports
 play a significant role in human
life
;
need
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 arises that
impiment
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implement
sport
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 curriculum should
impliment
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implemented
 as
necessasity
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necessity
necessary
 course in all
instituations
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institutions
,
thus
, I hope for the
beterment
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betterment
 of
humanbeing
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human being
this
 may
occour
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occur
 as soon as possible.
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