It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays people around the world have to find

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solution to mitigate the burden of their life for the purpose to make

time-efficient

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on

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doing the task. Meanwhile, people believe if they take a

risk

in their

lives

, it will make them

to

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learn more knowledge

as well as

make them to be easy for doing a particular job. In

this

essay, I will give an example of taking

risk

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and I do agree that the advantages take more place than

disadvantages

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the disadvantages

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.

To begin

with, in

modern

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era,

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humanity

have

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been educated since their school to gain more knowledge which will make them

to

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be advanced

on

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doing their projects.

Therefore

, they take a

risk

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opportunity which they desire to

be happened

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.

For instance

, in their professional

lives

, they have to bow out from a previous job in order to take a chance for getting a better job,

in contrast

with folks who do not

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so they do not know if the possibility would

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come out Despite

of

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more merits

in

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taking

risk

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, the drawback could not be set aside and always have a chance to occur.

For example

, in

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personal

lives

, some communities rely totally

to

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their house-maid to manage fully their house as the maid will help them to reduce the burden

activity

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of activity

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which can be taken over by other people,

however

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the house assistant would have the big chance to do a thief since they are given a

completely

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trust.

To sum up

, I contend that we have to be selective to take a

risk

in our

lives

. We have to combine

with

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the

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feeling and

logical

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before making a decision with the aim of reducing

risk

, even though it always

have

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a benefit but the

risk

always to be controlled.