The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012.

The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012.
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The line graph compares the proportion of export from Australia to 4 different nations, including India, Japan,
China
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and
US
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for a period of 22 years.
It is clear that
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total
exports
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to
China
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and India saw a noticeable rise,
while
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US and
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export declined rapidly. By the end of the period, Chinese
exports
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were by far the highest ones, followed by
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, Americans, and
at the end
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, Indian ones. In 1990,
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exports
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were significantly higher than other nations,
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approximately 27%.
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, Indian
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were the lowest amount among all, exporting at a negligible amount.
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China
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received only under 5% of
exports
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, the equivalent figure for America was more than 10%, almost 11%. Between 1990 and 2010,
Japanese
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exports
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declined rapidly from almost 27% to under 20%.
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,
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proportion of explores fluctuated and
finally
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decreased to 6%.
In contrast
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, the figures for both nations,
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and India, saw a considerable increase
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29% and 5%, respectively, by 2012.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words china, exports, japanese with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
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