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Some people feel that manufacturers and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of goods others argue that customers should avoid buying goodswith a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Certain individuals believe that producers and shopping malls have the right to lower the
prices
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 of packaging of
products
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 bought meanwhile others dispute the facts and support that customers should refrain from purchasing
products
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 with plenty of packaging. In my view, I would say buyers should abstain from buying
products
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 with higher packaging. I will explain my points better in subsequent paragraphs and be supported by relevant examples.
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, certain individuals think they can lower the
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 of packaged
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,
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this
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 is outright possible but not generally accepted by the public most individual feels packaging of goods is the best because it makes the goods look attractive and acceptable
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 in a supermarket where I went shopping for some items I got a lot of packages at a reduced price and
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 made it awesome.
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, most people resent the idea of buyers that they should desist from purchasing materials supplied with many packaging and
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 is because most customers do not have access to the packaged
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, as they might not be able to afford the
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,
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 in a situation whereby
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 being sold cannot be affordable by buyers at that time, I would say in my own opinion that any product with high packaging should be ignored because
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 can cause people to live above their means. In conclusion, it is obvious that some individuals support the fact that producers and their
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 in the superstores can bring down the
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 of packaged goods,
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, some other folks feel consumers should desist from procuring items with increased packaging. I opined to the fact that consumers should refrain from acquiring
products
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 with lots of packaging
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