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Some people feel that manufacturers and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of goods. Others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Some people are of the notion that manufacturers and supermarkets should bring down the
cost
 involved in the packaging of
goods
whereas
, others believe consumers should flee from
goods
 that
has
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 so much packaging.
Although
,
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 I believe packaging attracts
the
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apply
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buyers to buy more, it
however
 is a choice and customers should avoid
goods
 that
costs
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 more. Generally, most businesses take conscious note
on
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of
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 the way their
goods
 appear to the public, sight is the first part to initiate attention
of
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to
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 a particular good and
therefore
, they take note of the way they present their
goods
 and the only way to portray
this
 is through proper packaging. These exterior
look
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looks
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 can be quite expensive and many manufacturers will still do
this
 to attract good buyers, they should reduce the
cost
 of these packaging to allow less privileged to access it.
Nevertheless
, customers should avoid
goods
 with a lot of packaging to cut down
cost
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. These
goods
 are more expensive because of the
cost
 involved and the consumers
has
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have
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 the option to pick.
For instance
, cassava flakes in the regular market can
cost
 500naira per kg
whereas
, the supermarkets will charge triple,
this
 is because they are sealed and labelled. The customers should leave those
goods
 and buy the more affordable
one
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ones
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. In conclusion, I firmly believe manufacturers and supermarkets should reduce the amount of packaging,
however
, consumers can
also
 avoid them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainability
  • Eco-friendly
  • Carbon footprint
  • Excessive packaging
  • Biodegradable materials
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Consumer advocacy
  • Environmental stewardship
  • Waste reduction
  • Recycling initiatives
  • Green practices
  • Minimalist lifestyle
  • Resource conservation
  • Sustainable consumption
  • Packaging alternatives
  • Regulatory measures
  • Ethical choices
  • Environmental impact assessment
  • Renewable resources
  • Compostable packaging
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