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Some people feel packaging of goods by manufacturer in supermarket are expensive while, some says that neighborhood should avoid buying of package goods in the supermarket. Discuss both views . Give reason for your answer and include relevant example from your knowledge or experience

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There has been a lot of controversy over
price
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the price
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 of
goods
 that are packaged. Some
individual
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individuals
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 said
the
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that
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 manufacturers and
the
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apply
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supermarkets should reduce the
amount
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number
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 of
packaging
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packaged
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goods
.
while
,
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apply
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 others have
there
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their
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 opinion that
customer
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customers
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 should decline
buying
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to buy
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 of repacked
goods
.
Although
 packaged items look suitable and reduce customer time for
cross-check
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,
it
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they
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 can
also
 be unaffordable for some people because of the additional charges for the rebranding done on the
product
 thereby preventing equity among consumers.
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 will be expatriates in the essay. Packaging of
stuffs
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stuff
kinds of stuff
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 in the shopping mall is very good as it
help
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helps
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 to make it look attractive to the customers and
reduce
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reduces
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 stress for
recheck
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a recheck
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.
for
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For
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 instance when you buy beans in the market you will need to pick the unwanted particles in
it
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them
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 out before cooking at home ,
this
 will save the
person's
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people
person
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 from stress. Unlike beans bought from the supermarket that
were
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was
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 already picked before packaging. In
another word
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other words
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, rebranding
of
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apply
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goods
 can sometimes
expensive
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be expensive
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 which will prevent equity among buyers. Because the
manufacturer
want
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wants
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there
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their
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 output to be unique they put in some effort to make that
product
 accepted in the labour market.in return
of
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for
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 their
efforts
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,efforts
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 money will be paid
while
those money
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that money
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 will
be place
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be placed
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 on the
product
 resulting in
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an in-filterated
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in-filterated
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in-filtered
in-filtrated
 commodity
price
. For there to be equity the
manufacturer
 and the mall owner should make some adjustments to add moderate
price
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prices
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 on
product
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products
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 not ambiguous.
if
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If
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,
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apply
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 the added
price
 is not much the community will continue to patronise them.
For example
, in the public market buying
of
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apply
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beans is 500 naira and in the shop
its
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it's
it is
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 600
naira
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nairas
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 since
,
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apply
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the difference is not high the
neighborhood
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neighbourhood
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 will no longer
thought
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think
be thought
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 of not buying stuff in the supermarkets. In conclusion,
due to
 the controversy over
packaging
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the packaging
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 of
goods
 in shops by
manufacturer
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manufacturers
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 making it expensive and restrictions of people not to purchase it. I will say that the
manufacturer
have
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has
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alots
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lots
 of
adjustment
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adjustments
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 to put in place to enable continuity of patronage by not adding much
on
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to
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 the materials. The
neighborhood
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neighbourhood
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do
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does
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 not need to stop going to the shops to buy their commodity since it's just little differences.
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