Some people feel that manufacturers and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of goods. Others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

These days public discussion has been going on over whether the
producers
and the supermarkets have greater control to reduce the quantity of packaging of
goods
while
others believe it is the responsibility of the
consumers
to stop buying
goods
with a lot of packaging . From my own
perspective
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I believe the
producers
,the supermarket have greater
responsibly
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than
consumers
in the packaging of
goods
. Packaging of
goods
involve
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involves
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many technical
process
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processes
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,
is
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and is
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not just about selling
goods
to the
consumers
.
Also
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producers
are responsible for manufacturing
quality
materials for the
consumers
,
while
the supermarket is a means where the manufactured
goods
are being sold to the
consumers
.
However
,
Manufacturer
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Manufacturers
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must be able to
package
their
goods
in order for
it
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them
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to
more
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be more
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enticing for the wholesaler who will
then
distribute
it
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them
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so as to reach the
consumers
.
Moreover
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packaging of
goods
is a form of advertisement ,it makes the
goods
to be more attractive
for
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to
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the customer
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customer
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customers
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. Despite the fact that
advertisement
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advertisements
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increase the demand
by
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of
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the
consumers
but if the
goods
are too expensive it can lead to low sales of
product
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the product
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which can cause low profit for the manufacturer or the marketers .
Additionally
,
Packaging
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the Packaging
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of
goods
increase
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increases
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the sales of the materials ,
it
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apply
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displays good
quality
and it
also
added more
values
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value
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to the
product
although
it can be more expensive which can
leads
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lead
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to low sales of
product
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the product
a product
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.But
producers
can make it more convenient and easy for the customers by reducing the packaging ,but the
product
is still more genuine and have great
quality
.
Although
,people who believe customers should avoid buying
goods
with
alot
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a lot
of packaging are not totally wrong , considering the price of a
well
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good
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package
product
and that of a low
package
product
the price are not always the same. Despite the fact that people love cheap things ,they still know that a
well
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good
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package
product
is different from a
low standard
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product
. Most importantly when purchasing a
product
the price of a
product
is very important ,followed by the
quality
of the
product
and
also
the presentation of the
product
. Having considered all the arguments above ,I would conclude that
producers
and supermarkets are more responsible to reduce the amount of packing of
goods
than
consumers
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainability
  • Eco-friendly
  • Carbon footprint
  • Excessive packaging
  • Biodegradable materials
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Consumer advocacy
  • Environmental stewardship
  • Waste reduction
  • Recycling initiatives
  • Green practices
  • Minimalist lifestyle
  • Resource conservation
  • Sustainable consumption
  • Packaging alternatives
  • Regulatory measures
  • Ethical choices
  • Environmental impact assessment
  • Renewable resources
  • Compostable packaging
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