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You should Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the 19th century. The map below shows the development of the village.

You should Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the 19th century. The map below shows the development of the village.
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The map illustrates the development of Chorleywood
village
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 from the year
of
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1868 to 1994.
Overall
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,
villages
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 were increased and some roads for cars, motors and train were constructed than in 1868. To see
a
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the
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center
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centre
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 of
map
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the map
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, there is a
park
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 and golf course, which is surrounded
with
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by
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 roads. Main roads are being forwarded
both
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on both
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side
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sides
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 of
east
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the east
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, west, south and north.
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, on the south of
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park
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the park
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, there is a railway which was constructed in 1909 and there is a
staion
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station
 located inside of a town that was built in the period of 1883 to 1922.
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, a motorway,
built in
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built-in
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 1970 locates
in
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 the right side of the
park
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 and it passes
through
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from the north to the south of
this
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village
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. Some
villages
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 were built in various places of Chorleywood.
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This
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 period of
in
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1970 to 1994, the most number of
villages
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 were made. In
this
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 period, lots of them were built
along with
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motorway
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motorways
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. The initial
village
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of in
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1868 to 1883
located
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was located
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 inside of
park
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 but after that,
in
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from
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 1883 to 1922, the bigger
village
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 was made near the bottom part of
original
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village
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 and from 1922 to 1970, two
villages
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 were built
both
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on both
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 east and west sides of secondest constructed
village
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words village, villages, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Steadily
  • Pivotal events
  • Significant change
  • Transportation links
  • Commuter village
  • Residential areas
  • Commercial areas
  • Public facilities
  • Infrastructure
  • Environmental impact
  • Community life
  • Conservation efforts
  • Maintaining character
  • Vicinity
  • Unique aspects
  • Common challenges
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