The line graph shows the information average number of visitors entering a museum in summer and winter in 2003. Write a report for university lecturer describing the information shown below

The line graph shows the information  average number of visitors entering a museum in summer and winter in 2003. Write a report for university lecturer describing the information shown below
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The chart below shows the actual figure of
people
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coming to
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the museum
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museum
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museums
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in
harmattan
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Harmattan
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and
rainy
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the rainy
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season in the year 2003. It's in thousand
unit
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units
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per individual. It's seen that
alot
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a lot
of
people
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enter
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museum
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museums
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during the
summer
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period
that
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than
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winter
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time
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.Both the
summer
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and
winter
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takes
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off at zero
time
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with no visitor entry
the
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to the
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museum
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.
Eventually
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,Eventually
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the
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summer
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number of summer
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visitor
increase
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increased
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1300
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by 1300
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by 1100
time
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and decline
at
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by
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1200 by 1500
people
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to 800
individual
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individuals
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at 1400 and gradually decrease to no person at 1800. The
winter
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slightly
increase
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increases
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to 500
person
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people
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at 1000
time
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and has
a
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an
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instability entry until it reaches 600 visitors
of
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out of
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1200 and
then
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has
drastic
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a drastic
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decrease to no visitors at 1400 and
maintain
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a static movement from 1500 to 1800. In conclusion, the
museum
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opens at the same
time
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in
winter
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and
summer
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and closes at
exact
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the exact
an exact
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time
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both
people
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visiting
at
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in
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summer
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as
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a
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higher number than
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winter
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in winter
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period
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Add some linking words.
Linking words: Add more linking words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, museum, summer, winter, time with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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