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Some people believe that governments should pay full course fees for students who want to study in universities. Do you agree or disagree with this statement

#people #governments #course #fees #students #study #universities
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 perspective heading a debate
whether
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 students must have full payment for
universities
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study
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 with many claiming
this
 notion
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other
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others
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rejecting
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 it. In my view, I believe that education is key
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 success for any organization,
moreover
, learning at universities is
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 that all
citizen
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citizens
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 must have. First of all,
Although
 many people believe that
instead
 of paying for universities government must spend more
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on
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 infrastructure and public transport
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systems
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 which help all parties in
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society.
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 believe that education is right that will students across the nation must acquire ,despite
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 gender age or background. Another point is that any country
need
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 bright minds to lead the future vision and reach
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their
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 and
economy
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 high levels.
In particular
, Countries
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that
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 spend
in
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on
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 education are leading in the process of innovation and development in all sectors.
For example
, Nowadays, in Saudi Arabia , the
number
 of engineers increase
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% compared to 2012 .
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,
by
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having
greater
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number
 of educated citizens
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will lead to
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the
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number
 of ignorance
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having less
number
 of homeless in
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.
Finally
,
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learning and studying will prevent
teenager
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teenagers
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 from wasting their time and money
in
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on
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 harmful
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activities
activites
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activities
 or even taking drugs which destroy their personal and
country
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 future
Overall
 , on balance , I believe that citizens must have the right to acquire degrees from all different
background
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backgrounds
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. Teenagers are the future of countries .
Therefore
,
government
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the government
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 must invest in them in all fields.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Higher education
  • University tuition
  • Public good
  • Economic growth
  • Fiscal responsibility
  • Merit-based scholarships
  • Need-based grants
  • Socioeconomic status
  • Educational equity
  • Income-contingent loans
  • Graduate tax
  • Financial aid
  • Student loans
  • Subsidize
  • Taxpayer funding
  • Underappreciation
  • Workforce development
  • Access to education
  • Higher learning institutions
  • Government expenditure
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