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Many people believe that today there is a general increase antisocial behavior and lack of respect for others. What might have caused this situation? How to improve it?

#people #behavior #lack #respect #situation
Introduction It is miserable that in the middle of vast development in every pasture of
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distasteful actions and
people
 don't respect each other.
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this
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 condition. But it has
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.Most
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people
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work or study So they don't pay attention or take care of their parents.And nowadays most
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children are linked to the telephone and
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. Even parents too.Even children can see
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violent media or films on
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 phone. That's why
people
 today despise each other and don't reverence each other There are many solutions to
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 problem .
People
 should devote time to their family and work . And of
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 it is necessary to allocate time correctly. I think
government
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 should
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 maximize working hours. And the same for everyone. So all the right To summarize distasteful actions and variety problems can cause
people
's distrust of each other . And there are steps to improve it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diminished
  • empathy
  • individualism
  • self-centered
  • economic pressures
  • competitive nature
  • manifest
  • traditional moral values
  • aggressive content
  • anonymity
  • consequences
  • character education
  • social and emotional learning
  • community-based programs
  • ethical teachings
  • socio-economic contributors
  • regulating
  • promotes
  • discourages
  • foster
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