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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food.. It is there fore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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In the not-too-distant past, fast
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 has been spread widely, and
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, many people have indulged in consuming them in several countries. So, they have undergone some diseases, unluckily. It is considered that authorities should struggle with eating fast
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 by taking much more
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. I completely disagree with
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 various solutions are able to be presented in
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 issue
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 as economic crisis and feeling happy. I will examine these hurdles in
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 essay. There is a compelling argument to support the idea that governments ought to meddle to
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 not to eat fast
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 via taking higher
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. They assume that if citizens pay a bit more tax to their country, they will be avoided to desire fast
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.
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, it had been tried in the little region of Thailand in 2009 by increasing
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 on fast
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 and they succeeded it.
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, despite that minor implementation, taking higher
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 is completely preposterous of because the Global Economic Crisis in 2010. Since the Crisis exploded, the economies of most countries have narrowed adversely.
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, they are tended to prompt inhabitants to consume fast
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. Because
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 the production of fast
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 is rather cheaper than the other diets in restaurants.
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, when people add
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fast
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 to their
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 program, they are nice to eat it regularly. The happiness of consuming fast
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 outweighs the drawbacks.
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, the governments should not affect the fast
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 to eat. In conclusion, the responsible people for us would like to have much more
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 for fast
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;
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, when we reckon the pros of consuming fast
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, there are a considerable amount of benefits to
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