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Write an email to the community picnic organizer . Your email should do the following things: Express your overall enjoyment of last week’s event. Explain why each potluck dish needs a list of ingredients. Describe how the potluck could be differently organized next year.

#email #community #picnic #organizer #enjoyment #week’s #event #potluck #dish #list #ingredients #year
Hi Organizing Manager, I write
this
 email to express an improvement area which I suggest to consider for any
such
 future events.
Firstly
, I overjoyed the
last
 week's event. It was perfectly organized with
an
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 unique combination of food and cultural activities.
Performance
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 of teenage group dance stands out. I see one area of improvement
i.e
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i.e.
, listing the items/
ingredient's
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ingredients
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 of each dish. I feel
this
 should be
must
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 as you know a few people are allergic
for
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 nuts and seafood. We should avoid these red flags in
such
gathering
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. I would like to suggest how we can handle
this
. Either we can keep a table
that is
a
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nut free
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 and other as
seafood free
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 food. By
this
 people will have a clear picture
for
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 choosing the food. Or we can go with
traditional
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the traditional
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 approach
as
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 listing the items involved
at
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 the dish. I appreciate again
for
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all the handwork your team had put through. Sincere Regards, Deepak
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