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Some parents think that math lessons are redundant and this subject should be removed as school lessons but others' opinion mathematical is neccesary for pupuls' future life. Many people have their own devices that are help to calculate. This essay will analayze both sides of this topic.

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While
 Some
parents
 feel that teaching mathematics is an essential part of teaching in the education system but others say that it is unnecessary for our life. Both the topic will be analyzed in
this
 essay. There are a growing number of
parents
 who believe that
math
 should be estranged as a school curriculum because it has become needless. They have reason to believe that
math
 is redundant and it has no demand for our future life. For ,example a recent study suggests that 90% of calculation work is done using calculations or computers. These
parents
 think that
math
 should be removed.
On the
contrary
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 the people who desire to estrange
math
 as a school science are those who feel that it is a significant part of children's future careers.
Finally
,
math
 supplies children with various environmental ways to imagine the world.
For example
, if people are faced with calculation during their work, they can do it faster in their brain when they have organized the
math
. For these reasons, there are many
parents
 who believe
math
 should remain
as
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a subject in schools. Many
parents
 believe that
math
 is not effective and is futile. Other
parents
 do not agree and feel that it is advantageous.
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