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Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born. What might be the reasons for this? What are the advantages and disadvantages?

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A person loves to live in a town close to his place of birth, and it is important to him.
Therefore
, most individuals prefer a place to
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 permanent residence.
This
 article intends to define the reasons for
this
 decision, clarify its pros and cons, and conclude with my conclusion.
Although
 some people have moved to cities different from the ones where they were born, apply mostly they are brought up in the same place where they were born.
First,
people are familiar with the customs and traditions of the
city
 they live in from their early days, as moving to a new
city
 is a challenge for them.
Secondly
, when the house in which they are born is well-built and basic necessities are easily accessible, they prefer to stay.
Finally
, it is important to take care of their parents when needed as they get older.
Hence
, to keep up with
this
 challenge, they prefer not to venture out of their hometown. Advantages and
Disadvantages
 to moving from where one is raised, we start with the advantages.
First,
a person is social by nature and does not like to be away from the people who live around him, because he knows them better in their attitudes and behaviour.
This
 gives comfort and social calm.
Secondly
, I connect with the friends I grew up with back home whenever I have free time, which helps me relax
while
 I'm with them.
Finally
, love and loyalty are placed in every person's heart. As for the
disadvantages
, they are as follows:
First,
missing an opportunity to experience a new adventure in life by moving to another
city
.
Second,
not taking advantage of job opportunities for a better career.
Finally
, not taking advantage of making new friends in the other
city
. In conclusion, it is important to know that as our life progresses we need to make the right decisions at the right time.
Moreover
, these details will help us to know the advantages and
disadvantages
 more clearly. And we come to a decision whether moving to another
city
 has more benefits for us than
disadvantages
.
However
, the decision may vary based on personal preferences as well.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Familiarity
  • Comfort
  • Social ties
  • Family ties
  • Belonging
  • Resources
  • Opportunities
  • Fear
  • Unknown
  • Financial constraints
  • Cultural attachment
  • Language barriers
  • Limited education
  • Skills
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